SHOWING THE PROBLEMS WITH YESTERDAY’S SHORT FICTION
I want to take a critical approach to the short fiction piece that I wrote yesterday. This is tough because, as I stated before, we do not like to be critiqued. But I am going to critique my own writing to show how grossly flawed the short story actually is. Let’s get ready to shred!
[READ HERE AT THE BOTTOM FOR THE STORY IF YOU’D LIKE – Link to the Previous Post]
GLARING PLOT HOLE:
I describe how the man Aaron works at a police precinct where the officers had forgotten his name.
This is foolish. In what secret agency detective scenario is a POLICE OFFICER DETECTIVE DUDE so undercover that he is not known within his own precinct. That makes no sense. But for the purpose of the plot, I felt that I needed to insert something so that I could progress the story.
In your writing, don’t ever do this. This will come off as lazy and inconsistent. We never want our readers to say: “Hmm…well I guess that could happen.” If you have to say that, then the level of credibility for the rest of your story crumbles. And for the record. There is a HUGE plot hole in THE HUNGER GAMES, but the hole is covered by a compelling plot that not many people notice it. I don’t want to be a spoiler, so I won’t say what it is. Feel free to email / private message me if you want to know.
Why in the world would secret agent dude murder his wife based solely on the pretense of a letter? I mean. This was his high school sweetheart, and he doesn’t even question her about it. He’s a detective, and detectives ask questions. He asked none. That type of attitude would have had gotten him killed in the streets.
Why in the world would secret agent dude murder his wife in his home? The evidence would all be linked back to him, and even though he says that he can cover it up because of the letter, the letter is the one thing that would link him to the crime. That’s just poor writing on my part. So yeah…DUMB! (Btw: I’m cracking up as I think about how stupid this is LOL).
Why in the world would secret agent dude not read the back of the letter once he got it? I mean, if he is indeed a secret agent dude, then he has been trained to investigate everything.
Why in the world would secret agent detective DAD not care about what his daughter would think if she found her dead mother’s corpse at the top of the stairs in the morning. Yeah…breakfast wouldn’t have gone over too well.
So all in all, the mood is great. The tone is great. The twist is great, but the story is awful. It doesn’t work, and the sooner I come to terms with that, the sooner I will realize that this story just doesn’t fly.
We have to be willing to take an objective approach to our novels if we are going to sell anything. This novel would have been ripped apart by critics anyway, and the readers’ frustration would have only caused one thing: Them never buying another book under my name again. Not cool.
Set your calendars. Next week is dialogue, and Monday’s post is sure to FIRE you up. 🙂