“I coulda’ gotten out…if I wanted to. That rusted old wire and the broken-down-sorry-excuse for a fence surely wuddn’t enough to hold me inside. Thought about it a lot. Leaving, that is. Cops probably’d drag me right back. Besides, there wuddn’t be no betta’ place for-me after I done killed a man. Killed’em dead. Wuddn’t mind bringin’em back to life and killin’em again – fi’ had tha’ chance. Ole’ boy had it comin’. Law didn’t see it dat way though. But like I told’em, ‘You touch my daughter, you best hope tha’ devil gits you ‘fore I do.’”
WRITTEN BY STADLER STYLE. SPONSORED BY MADISON WOODS.
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Loved it 🙂
Thanks Soma!
Nothing like a father’s determination at the behest of his young daughter’s virginity. Great story!
http://jonathanmwright.wordpress.com/2012/04/25/only-100/
Yeah you’re right! Thanks, Jonathan!
‘Killed’em dead. Wuddn’t mind bringin’em back to life and killin’em again – fi’ had tha’ chance’ Had such a vivid picture in my mind of this man. I wrote something similar a while back – over protective father over stepping the mark!
http://freejournowriter.wordpress.com/2012/04/27/friday-fictioneers-flowers/
And if you’re interested here’s the short I wrote ages ago along the same theme
http://freejournowriter.wordpress.com/2012/02/08/the-pick-up/
Thanks, Emma! I appreciate the feedback!
Intriguing character who is begging to be hated and loved at the same time. I think you brought out this duality very nicely, though I choose to hate him. He seems to be getting pleasure out of killing and would do so again if the need arises. The redeeming factor is his daughter. Excellent! So much in so few words!
Here is mine: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/04/27/fridayfictioneers-sobibor/
Thanks, readinpleasure! I appreciate that! And yeah, he’s a love’em or hate’em kinda character.
Obviously no regrets here, except for the fact that he can’t do it all over again. Nice voice in this, very convincing.
Mine’s at http://castelsarrasin.wordpress.com/2012/04/27/trespass/
Thanks, Sandra! I appreciate that!
I’d be inside the fence too, had he touched my daughter.
Here’s mine: http://thebradleychronicles.wordpress.com/
completely agree
We won’t miss him in our neighborhood.
LOL!!!!!! That’s hilarious!
Lol. I can picture what he’d look like. Scraggly guy, leaning against the building, running his mouth. Great story.
My attempt: http://unduecreativity.wordpress.com/2012/04/26/sharp/
Thanks, TheOthers! I appreciate that.
thank u for sharing
np, Terry!
Always love vigilante stories and I love the fact that he’d bring him back to life just to kill him again, LOL. Good one!
I enjoyed this piece immensely. I liked the way you made the character so complex in so few words and captured the way behavior is not always easily fit into the categories of good or evil. I saw it on Fresh Ink today as well. Good work.
Here’s mine: http://postcardfiction.com/2012/04/27/scraped/
Thanks, Janet. I appreicate the feedback. Writing 100 words can be tough. Good practice though.
A man with a story, if I’ve ever seen one. You did well portraying his complex character.
Me: http://the-drabbler.com/trespass/
Robert. I really appreciate the compliment. Thanks for stopping by
Sorry to bother you on this end of the weekend. I have a silly request. Please read today’s post on my blog about The Bradley Chronicles. I’d appreciate it if you could read it and then vote for my segment. You’ll see what I mean. Thanks in advance, Fay
Not a problem, Fay. I hope I wasn’t too late, but I just voted for you. Sorry I missed your message, but I typically don’t check my WP over the weekend.
Thanks so much. If you get a chance to read today’s post, you’ll see that, in my excitement, I misinterpreted the directions. JK Bradley was gracious and accepted part of the blame. Nevertheless, the positive response from folks likel you buoyed me up in my sea of shame. 🙂
reminds me of “a time to kill.” a very good john grisham book.
now that’s a compliment. thanks